Hi Don,
Good progress. That is the same set up that I used to take this photo (this is uncropped or photoshopped):

f/10 @ 1/15th.
This is not a straight forward technique - but then if it was as easy as it looks everyone would have the shots. I think these sorts of images will be easier with the Inon Endoscope lens - although that does produce a slightly different looking perspective.
The ket to this technique is to get very, very close to the subject. I think you have achieved this with the second image. You need to select a critter that you can get right up to without it being scared. Frogfish/scorpionfish are ideal. With more skittish subjects you will need to dedicate more time. I spent two dives with the ghost pipefish in my image.
Then once get close you need to work on the lighting. When a subject is just a few cms (1 inch) from your port it is tough to light - but you need it this close to get the magnification effect on the subject. It can take a while to get the lighting right - and it is best to set it up on a non-mobile subject, like a sponge, before moving in on your actual subject. You strobe light is too much behind the single ghostpipefish
These shots are interesting because they combine a macro foreground with a wide angle background and therefore you have to choose an exposure that is long enough to burn in enough background light to achieve this. This usually means a long exposure, considering you will be stopped down considerably to get some reasonable depth of field. I also use filters on my Inon strobes to help the blues for these types of shots.

f/13 @ 1/25th - this was a small frogfish as you can see from the sponge.
Alex